miércoles, 6 de noviembre de 2013

Story

There was once a little boy named robert,robert he has a naughty 17 year old who never listen to his parents because his parents were farmerrs and he knew when he grew up he would become on to take care of the family business, he wanted to see the world so he ran away from hin home and went away,without telling anyone or so. The first stop he made was to s store  where he realized he didnt brought any money for his "adventure trip" so he had to get a job,the manager of that store put him in the most boring job ever he had to count the number of person that would enter to his store but fortunately time passed(2 months) so he gathered enough money to continue his trip so robert had a besutiful 3 months until he saw a wanted sign it was his face, his parents were looking despererately so he decide to come back but there was a problem he has on the other side of the world with again no money and he working as slave so he had no chance of not coming back he died working as slave and thats what happens when you dont listen to your  parents at the begfing was great but he endes in trouble and could never came back 

1 comentario:

  1. I like how your story has a lesson. Your main character is also very relatable. This story needs a bit more editing watch your punctuation because its hard to read things without periods and commas do you know what I mean? Seems like you were a bit rushed. Metaphor/comparison? 8

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